I received really positive feedback on both sessions we have done this. Being a self-critic though, I really wasn't happy with how it flowed after I watched it. This time, I focused on ensuring I transitioned well, had call to actions thought out, and started off with a serious of attention-grabbing questions, statements, and voice inflections.
This pitch is almost perfect. You're structure, tone and language are on point. The idea of the coffee shop is awesome since I myself am an coffee enthusiast and tired of Starbucks, since it is bad coffee in my opinion. Hence, I do not see any points of improvement. Good luck with your idea!
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ReplyDeleteI liked how you started your pitch. I also find helpful mentioning real life examples where your idea could be used. I feel your video was little bit short; however, I enjoyed how energetic you were. I would also recommend using the sunlight just because of the glare the light creates. Other than that, I believe you did a good job. Great post.
Once again this is a great pitch. I try to base my pitches on yours. My only critic is to add a bit more enthusiasm, but besides that your pitch was the best one so far.
ReplyDeleteHey alan, this pitch was great. I like how enthusiastic you were and how you got all your points across. It was awesome to see how enthusiastic you were about the coffee shop and it was a great pitch overall!
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